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-solitary- by ~shatteredone:iconshatteredone:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




look at her
can you see?

look at her tears
her tears of rain pouring
from the clouds of her soul.
do you taste them?

lick her wounds
the ones caused
from the dagger of love
piercing its way
into your flesh.
everytime.
do you feel her?

and there she sits
tasting her own pain
licking her own wounds
failing to see.
she lives in her
imaginary.
this is where
she feels her pain
caused by her reality.

only she feels it.
©2003-2009 ~shatteredone
:iconshatteredone:

Author's Comments

i wrote this in creative writing. i don't like it all THAT much.. but its just another poem.. enjoy.. :|

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~school Sep 18, 2003, 6:40:22 PM
:+favlove: Nice job! Powerful words for a great poem. I think you did a lovely job on this. A real :winner: of words and thoughts this is. I mean it. I really do. Let me know in a note if you want this :+favlove:d or not.
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~contaminatedwata Sep 18, 2003, 7:05:55 PM
wow. i LOVE this. that's beautiful writing, chelsie. i'm gonna fav this.

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~vampyrezraven Sep 19, 2003, 7:30:57 AM
whoa. amazing as usual. +fav for sure

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~adrenalinerush Sep 19, 2003, 11:07:15 AM
where is all this amazing work coming from?? I didnt think ms newton had the power to bring it out of people...!?
This is really good chelsie, keep it up!

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Nobody becomes an artist unless they have to.
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~fadednostalgia Sep 19, 2003, 11:12:29 AM
Awesome job, Chels. You always incorporate senses into your poems so very well. Major props for that.

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=[faded nostalgia]=
-Oxymoronic or perfect sense?
-Common desire or unwanted?
-Best cure or the main cause?
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~lightedfire Sep 19, 2003, 5:27:51 PM
Hello there ... .. sorry its been awhile, alot of things have been happening, and as I can see you've had some good things happening for you ... meaning this poem ... .. ..... its simply breath taking ....... it was soo clear that I'm now still trying to see the multi differences in people around here just by going off of your writing ..... ... it holds much truth to it, and I'm proud that you decided to put this writting up here. :D :aww:
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~imyselftheking Sep 19, 2003, 5:48:54 PM
Bout time you got into writing sweets

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"If your gonna weep keep it from sunshine, so no one sees.
I wont cry, above all things boy be a man"-Type O Negative
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~frtherisforver Sep 19, 2003, 6:27:45 PM
The trek of this poem is absolutely enticing. I like how you've stated that tears are pouring from clouds of her soul. It brings the image to life. And your use of question is almost chilling when you say, "only she feels it." Because it means that no one indeed sees the pain she is going through. Perhpas because she's masked it. But I'm lead to believe that it is quite obvious but others just disregard her and her "solitude."

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Is there no world for tomorrow if we wait for today?
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~dreamcatcher20 Sep 19, 2003, 7:21:41 PM
*tear* this is beautiful. i don't like creative writing much, but this was amazing. im faving this. chelsie keep up the great work.

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To love, to care, to listen...i am here.
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